Nocturnal Romance— Gardenia

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I hope you don't mind my comments. I only wish to offer suggestions. The above sounds like we just jumped into the middle of your story, so naturally, it is a little confusing. You mentioned elsewhere that sometimes you don't pay attention to the details as you're writing the story. The details are fine, but I think that in some descriptive passages, I got lost as to who you were describing. Perhaps replacing some pronouns with names might be helpful.