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For My Beloved— - Printable Version +- Gothic Romance Forum, a Community for Gothic Romance Fiction and Literature Lovers (https://www.gothicromanceforum.com) +-- Forum: Writing (https://www.gothicromanceforum.com/forumdisplay.php?fid=9) +--- Forum: Poetry (https://www.gothicromanceforum.com/forumdisplay.php?fid=26) +--- Thread: For My Beloved— (/showthread.php?tid=153) |
For My Beloved— - Epigraph - 03-24-2008 For My Beloved—
Carpe Noctum Sweetest, I have not slept these two days past Mingling high ecstasies with thoughts of Death The dread of knowing I can but borrow thee momentarily, When youth and love, locked hand in hand— The love within a kiss— tumultuously stirred The longings of mine stunted heart. Ah, love me ever, my sweet Juliet, Love is own brother to self-sacrifice; Pardon every wrong, When thou sigh’st, though sigh’st not wind But my soul. Love gave freely Love, a priceless price: The small frail heart beating in thy downy breast— A heart that dallies with love's luring tide. Yesternight the moon went hence, And yet is here today, And these precious, priceless moments With life, and death, and love, and fate; Present or absent from thy sweet laughter, Lie in my heart securely stored, For they who one another keep alive, N’er parted be. In this happiest hour there is a sigh— Beating heart to heart, as in dreamful swoon Sinking in thy deep delicious eyes of sapphire blue Filled with wonder at the way Two tangled souls can blend To weave a perfect life Free of care, of fear—of pain. RE: For My Beloved— - Desdemona - 03-28-2008 Wow. I agree with tamtam that you definitely have an affinity for poetry. I've never studied poetry so, unfortunately, I can't provide a very knowledgeable critique. But I enjoy the atmosphere of both poems and the imagery. The mood is definitely spot-on and they both remind me of the wistful sadness of Poe's "To Helen" and "Annabel Lee" (my favorite). I also appreciated your choice of words and how you strung them together in your sentences. Clearly, you spent a great deal of time and care on both poems. Worked for me! Good job! RE: For My Beloved— - Gladiator56 - 01-12-2009 great |